Andrews work evaluation

Persuasive genre	Andrew Persuasive Writing	Score 1-5
Audience	The writer’s capacity to orient, engage and persuade the reader	4
Text structure	The organisation of the structural components of a persuasive text (introduction, body and conclusion) into an appropriate and effective text structure	2
Ideas	The selection, relevance and elaboration of ideas for a persuasive argument	3
Persuasive devices	The use of a range of persuasive devices to enhance the writer’s position and persuade the reader	1.5
Vocabulary	The range and precision of contextually appropriate language choices	3
Cohesion	The control of multiple threads and relationships across the text, achieved through the use of grammatical elements (referring words, text connectives, conjunctions) and lexical elements (substitutions, repetitions, word associations)	4
Paragraphing	The segmenting of text into paragraphs that assists the reader to follow the line of argument	4.5
Sentence structure	The production of grammatically correct, structurally sound and meaningful sentences	3
Punctuation	The use of correct and appropriate punctuation to aid the reading of the text	4
Spelling	The accuracy of spelling and the difficulty of the words used	5
TOTAL		34 /50

Is it Cruel to Keep Animals in a Cage

So many animals have died only seeing the inside of a cage, this is not what nature planned for them. Animals should have the right to see and feel the wonder of the great out doors to feel the rain, the sun and the wind not to feel there faeces and the cleaners hose, this is not what nature planned for them. can you imagine the pain and pure boredom of staying in a cage only slightly bigger then yourself doing nothing and barely being able to move a single muscle or stretch aching joints, this is not what nature had planned for them.

It is inhumane to keep animals in cages that are unclean and to small, all animals should have the right to be able to move around on natural surfaces and eat food that is natural to where they live not dried pellets and canned extracts. Animals should also have the ability to run around and enjoy there life not be stuck in a cage only barely bigger than themselves.

Some people say that it is alright to keep animals in cages if they are hurt, sick or endangered but the only reason they are endangered is because of human hunting and the destruction of there natural habitats again by human. Also the injuring of animals is either a natural cycle or is caused by human innervation like the oil spill in the gulf of Mexico.

So to conclude the keeping of animals in cages for any reason is completely inhumane and should not be practised any where in the world. Nature did not plan for them to live in cages so why should they!